Peer Review worksheet

1)  The first paragraph gives a brief summary of Alice in Wonderland and how these disorders are common to humans but not really animals. Then it goes into the White Rabbit and the definition of GAD. The first sentence is very broad to the book Alice in Wonderland in general. I doubt it’s an attention-getting sentence but it does introduce the meaning behind Alice in Wonderland.

2)  A thesis statement has to be the main argument about what your paper is going to be about. It’s like an introduction to your body paragraphs. My thesis can be more specific about what my point of the Whit Rabbit it.

3)  Yes you can identify the main ideas of each paragraph because it’s the first sentence and it sums up what the paragraph is going to be about.tye main concepts explored in this paper are the symptoms of GAD and a brief explanation how it relates to the White Rabbit by using quotes. Each paragraph does not make a relevant point that has been covered. The main conclusions are how each symptom connects with the White Rabbit due to his actions and how it affects not only himself but others too. At the last sentence of my conclusion it also states that the White Rabbit is not the only one with a disorder.

4)  There are some run-o sentences where their needs to be a period to start a new sentence. Also some word-use can be necessary throughout my essay.

5)  It states the number page of each quote. It can be more into a paper reference format I suppose.

6)  Using quotes as back-up to support the main idea in each paragraph. My conclusion sums up what my whole main argument is about and how it shows so many psychological issues.       

First draft on Alice in wonderland

Alice in Wonderland is a very popular children’s book by Lewis Carroll which is full of interesting characters for kids to enjoy, and for us to analyze. Although Alice was the only human, there are so many animals in this story with human characteristics. Whether this was Carroll’s main intention or an accident, these creatures are open to so much psychological interpretation and may be diagnosed with so many symptoms that humans have to suffer with daily. One animal that took place of a human and a humans disorders was the White Rabbit. There are many disorders that humans can have, but it is not yet discovered that animals can have some mental disorders as well. One disorder that the White Rabbit seems to have is Generalized anxiety disorder (GAD). This disorder is characterized by feeling pressure and worrying about everyday things. Anxiety could be beneficial, for example: working on an essay 1 hour before its due can really help you finish it quick, but sometimes there’s too much pressure. When you worry too much it can interfere with your daily routines and if you do it too much you might develop (GAD). People with (GAD) anticipate disaster and it makes getting by the day difficult. The white rabbit is not only displayed as a rabbit that’s constantly looking at his watch, but also resembles generalized anxiety disorder which has three symptom's such as irritability, A feeling of being on edge, restless, or “keyed up”, and socially awkward by his actions throughout the story.

Social awkward is one symptom the White Rabbit displays during the first chapter when Alice is following the White Rabbit. “When the rabbit came near her, she began, in a low, timid voice, “if you please, sir---” the rabbit started violently, dropped the white kid gloves and the fan,and skurried away into the darkness as hard as he could go.(18) This shows that the rabbit seems to be either nervous or shy towards new people who are near him which makes him act crazy.

The White rabbit also shows irritability towards certain characters in the story based on their status. In other words the white rabbit acts differently towards Alice, the queen, and his slaves. When he mistakes Alice for his servant, he is very demanding saying “, “Why, Mary Ann, what are you doing out here?” Run home this moment, and fetch me a pair of gloves and a fan! Quick, now!” in a angry tone.(42) Another scene is when Alice is (119-120) She was walking by the White Rabbit, who was peeping anxiously into her face. “Hush! Hush!” said the Rabbit in a low, hurried tone. He looked anxiously over his shoulder as he spoke, and then raised himself upon tiptoe, put his mouth close to her ear, and whispered, “she’s under sentence of execution.” …....Alice gave a little scream of laughter. “Oh, hush!” the Rabbit whispered in a frightened tone. “The Queen will hear you! You see she came rather late, and the queen said--”(119-120) He is not intimidated by Alice but shows be be frightened by the queen hearing him talk as he whispers to Alice nervously. He also shows no respect towards his slave who yells “Do as I tell you, you coward!”. Overall he is not respectful with the characters who are inferior to him.

The feeling of being on edge,restless, or “keyed up” describes the White Rabbit when he is overwhelmed looking at his waistcoat-pocket and hurrying up repeatedly saying  “oh my ears and whiskers, how late it’s getting!”(3) and “Oh! the duchess, the duchess! oh! won’t she be savage if Ive kept her waiting!” (17) The white Rabbit has so many worries about getting himself to the place at a certain time and on top of that worrying about not disappointing certain people that it drives him insane.

The way the Rabbit’s characterized is as if he had this disorder, which in life is limited to humans. The Rabbit has his role in the story and gets by with the disorder, but it does get in his way sometimes. He and the rest of the characters all show many things psychological and although this is a children's book we can learn a lot from it.

The psychology of Alice in Wonderland

I’m still figuring out weather to talk about Freud and his ideas about how and why people dream compared to what Alice is experiencing in her dream or individualism. The topic about dreams also has to do with “wish fulfillment” which of course has different answers due to the fact that Alice and Freud think differently. However during Alice experiences throughout the book, it’s not specific that she is in an actual dream but from small clues throughout, it can be concluded that she is in a deep dream. Individualism can represent Alice how she changes from different sizes by drinking or eating certain elements. As she grows small, she acts more like a child rather when she gets big, she assumes she’s an adult. Also her experiences with the different creatures she comes upon also is an example of individualism. 

Alice in wonderland

I think this story so far is very interesting because it consist of alot imagination and questions whether it was all a dream or not. It also has an intersting story plot and lets us analyze what the real message of this is story is. As we read along the story, it somehow draws me into the story to a point that I can feel the experiences with Alice. The detail also allows us to get a clear image of how this new world she enters looks like.

HELLO!!!I'm Berenice  and I'm very easy to talk to and is known to be very jolly and giggling. I'm very open-minded and like meeting new people so don't hesitate to talk to me :D I'm 18 years old and my birthday is September 24 so I'm a Libra. My mayor is right now liberal arts for now but I'm still deciding whether I want to be a dentist or major in psychology. I wanted to be a dentist since middle school and haven’t changed my mind but psychology is also very interesting due to the fact that I like the material and love challenging myself to think deeper. I enjoy doing different activities such as sports, to hanging out with friends to watching movies. I also love trying new things because it’s a way to explore different cultures, activities and foods. I have done buggy jumping once and eventually want to do sky diving in the future but since its so risky and its a high percent that I might die, I'll try it when I'm way older just in case.

Ok lets see my background information.. Ok well I always lived in Brooklyn, NY but different parts in Williamsburg. I was born in Brooklyn hospital  not sure what time, let me ask.. Ok my mom said at 1:36 a.m. I also have a little brother who always assumes that when I’m talking on the phone, it’s a guy and he’s my boyfriend and takes the phone to say “Hi I know you’re my sisters boyfriend, have you guys kissed before?!” even if it’s a girl/ relative/anyone. Worst part, I have to share a room with him.

I’m not much of a planner, I’m very laid-back to do anything last minute with friends or family. My favorite colors are black, red and purple and prefer dark color. One thing I really love is music. I listen to everything but mostly electric/ techno due to raves and rock/metal. It releases stress and provides entertainment. I also love dancing, it’s a way to put things aside, let loose and brings me to a new dimension. Another two activities I enjoy doing is martial arts and boxing because it’s fun to compete against people and have fun.

Well about school, this is my second semester and my goal is to have a high GPA of 3.5 or higher. Since high school I have succeeded in this goal so hopefully it doesn’t fail in college. But if you want to know me more just ask, add me on FB, my number… you know the deal lol